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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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illustrates&nbsp
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the
number
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 of temporary migrant
workers
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 in four regions over the period from 2003 to
2006
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2006,
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as well as
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 the
number
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 of these
workers
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 per 1,000
people
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 in these
contries
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countries
 in 2006.
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, the
number
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of&nbsp
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of
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temporary migrant
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workers&nbsp
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workers
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 significantly increased between 2003 and 2006 across the four
countries&nbsp
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countries
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while&nbsp
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workers
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numbres&nbsp
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numbers
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 per 1000
people
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varied&nbsp
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varied
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from
a
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one
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 country to another in 2006. In detail,
United
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the United
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sates
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 scored the highest
number
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 of temporary migrant
workers
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 in the two years, increased from 577,000 to 678,000, followed by
United
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the United
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Kingdom
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kingdom
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kingdom,
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 where the
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 rose from 137,000 to 266,000 by 2006, surpassing Australia, 219,000,
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New Zealand
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, which
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 had the lowest numbers, around 87,000 in 2006.
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, despite being classed in the
last
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the other
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 three countries, New Zealand
leaded
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led
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 the
number
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 of
workers
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 per 1000
people
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 in 2006 with 21,1, followed by
Austratia
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Australia
 and
United
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the United
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Kingdom&nbsp
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Kingdom
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with 10,7 and 4,4, respectively and
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the united
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united states
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United States
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, 2,3. In conclusion, the
number
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 of
workers
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 per 1000
people
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 is not related to the
number
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 of Temporary migrant
workers
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, workers, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • temporary migrant workers
  • trends
  • absolute numbers
  • per 1,000 people
  • growth rate
  • per capita
  • labor markets
  • economies
  • significant
  • imply
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