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It has been argued that giving gifts to friends and family should not be encouraged, because money is often wasted on things that people do not like or want. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is
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believed
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completely disagree
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 mother happy, no matter what age they are
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 young children bring
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 the parents, they will always do whatever they can to make them happy
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 of gifts we see
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structure
Make a plan before you write. Pick three ideas and stick to them.
language
Use simple sentences. End one idea before you begin the next.
content
Stick to the topic of gifts and money. Give clear reasons.
content
Give one or two real life examples from your own life or from news.
perspective
You show that gifts can bring joy and you want to help family.
style
Your voice is clear and you say you disagree.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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