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Band 4.5

You recently organized an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter -say what the participants liked about the hotel -explain why they were unhappy about the food -Suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future

Dear
sir
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Sir
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, I am
john
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John
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,
employee
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an employee
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 of
xyz company
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XYZ Company
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. I am writing
this
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 letter to give
a
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apply
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feedback about your
food
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 service. To give you some background,
last
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 week our company
organized
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organised
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 a meeting in your hotel. The meeting
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last
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lasted
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 for
whole
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the whole
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 day. Fortunately, our staff like the hotels very much
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, specialy
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specialy
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especially
 the interior
and
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and outdoor environment.
they
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They
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 said that
,
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apply
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 the natural
envirnonment
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environment
help
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helps
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 them to
focused
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focus
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 on their task.
However
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, they are upset about the
food
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 served
in
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at
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 lunch.
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firstly
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Firstly
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, the
food
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 test was very good
but
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, but
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 the portion of the
food
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 is very less that it is not
satisfied
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satisfying
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 for one person as well.
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Secondly
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Secondly,
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 when they need help regarding the
items
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items,
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 the staff
in
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at
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food
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the food
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 counter are unable
tio giuide
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to guide
 them. I would like to give you some feedback that will help you to
improved
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improve
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 your
sevices
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services
.
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Firstly
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firstly
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firstly,
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 you should write a
porting
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portion
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 of the
food
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in
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on
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menu
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the menu
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. individual
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individual
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Individuals
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 should understand how much they will get in
theri
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their
 plate.
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secondly
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Secondly
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, you should train your staff so they will help your customers in your
absences
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absence
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thank
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Thank
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 you for your time and consideration. Your sincerely. john

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organization
Break the letter into clear lines. Start with a short note on why you write, then what you liked, the problem with lunch, and your fix.
grammar
Use only simple, clear words. Check spelling and form. Capitalize names and 'Yours sincerely'.
clarity
Be clear about the problem with the lunch: portion size, food choice, and help from staff. Use facts.
tone
Keep a calm and respectful tone. Use formal tone for this letter.
format
Follow a standard letter format: greeting, body in paragraphs, closing. If you write to a hotel, you may use 'Yours sincerely' with a comma.
content strength
The letter shows what the guests liked about the hotel (inside and outdoors).
structure strength
It mentions both a problem and a fix, so you aim to help.
tone strength
The note is polite and shows thanks for time and effort.
purpose strength
It is clear that you want to help the hotel improve future meals.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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