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The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The data presents the
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 of research
studens
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students
 that are in an
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Australian
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univeristy
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university
 in the years 2001 and 2010,
also
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 comparing their locality.
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, the total number of research
students
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 has increased
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compared to
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 the two years, making most of them locals,
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 the number of international
students
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 has increased more than locals. The
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amount
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number
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 of
students
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 rose
up
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from 38,849 to 54,081
just in
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 the span of 9 years. In
2001
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2001,
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 the number of local pupils was 33,657
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 makes up to 87% of all scholars
but
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 international scholars were just 5,192
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, which
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 makes them only 13%. In 2010, local
students
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 still made
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up most
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 of
the
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the total
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 by being 39,488
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however
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, international
students
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 had a large increase, growing almost three times compared to 2001 from 5,192 to 14,593, which
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almost to
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to almost
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 double the
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 in percentage, from 13% to 27%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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