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The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts show information about the Little Chalfont Library in 2016, including the ages of its members, the types of books that were borrowed, and the total number of
loans
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 from 2007 to 2016. Taking a closer look, in 2016, most library members were adults aged 18 to 64, who made up 51% of the users. Children accounted for 22%, followed by adults over 65 at 15%, and young adults aged 13 to 17 at 12%. Regarding the types of advances in 2016, children’s fiction and adult fiction were the most popular categories, each representing 38% of total
loans
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. Adult non-fiction came next with 13%,
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 the remaining categories,
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 as children’s non-fiction, young adults’ books, and audiobooks, made up much smaller proportions. The bar graph
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 a steady increase in total
loans
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 over the ten-year period. The figure rose from around 15,000
loans
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 in 2007 to roughly 21,000 in 2011. After a small drop in 2012, the number remained relatively stable before rising again to reach its highest point in
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2016,
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 around 22,000
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.
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, adult members formed the largest group, fiction books were the most borrowed items, and total
loans
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 increased over the ten-year period.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words loans with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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