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Nowadays companies and other organisations are requiring their employees to wear a uniform. What is your viewpoint on this? What are the advantages and disadvantages of wearing a uniform? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

In recent years, many companies and
organizations
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 have introduced mandatory office uniforms for their employees.
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 some people view
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 as an unnecessary restriction, I opine that workplace outfits offer more
benefit
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 than drawbacks, particularly in terms of professionalism and equality. On one hand, one major advantage of wearing
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professional attire is that it promotes a sense of identity and unity within the
cooperation
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corporation
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. When every staff member dresses in
similar
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a similar
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 manner, it reinforces teamwork and
reduce
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reduces
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 visible differences in social or economic status. Office apparels
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 enhance a business’s professional image, which is especially important in
customer facing
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customer-facing
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 roles,
such
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 as hospitality, healthcare, and retail.
For instance
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, patients often feel more confident when nurses and medical staff wear clearly identifiable
workwears
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workwear
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, formal work clothes remove the daily stress of choosing appropriate work attire, allowing
team-members
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 to focus on their tasks.
On the other hand
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, there are some disadvantages to consider.
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 employee dress code may limit personal expression, as colleagues cannot dress
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 their individual style or comfort preferences.
This
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 can be demotivating for some professionals, particularly in creative industries where cooperate image can be part of self-identity.
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, professional
attires
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attire
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 can sometimes be uncomfortable or unsuitable for certain weather conditions, leading to reduced comfort and productivity. Another concern is the cost:
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 some supervisors provide job outfits,
other
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others
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 require workers to purchase or maintain them, which may become a financial burden. In conclusion, despite a few disadvantages, I believe that the advantages of workplace wardrobe outweigh the negative consequences . They promote equality, strengthen
organizational
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 identity, and enhance professionalism.
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, company owners should ensure that those dress uniforms are comfortable, affordable, and suitable for the nature of the job.

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grammar
Fix key grammar points: 'cooperation' should be 'company' or 'organization', 'workwears' should be 'workwear' or 'uniforms', and 'team-members' should be 'team members'. Ensure 'reduces' matches the subject.
vocabulary
Choose simple words. Avoid phrases like 'corporate image' and 'cooperate image'. Use plain words: 'business image' or 'company image'.
task relationship
Give more clear facts or detail. Add more examples of jobs and how uniforms help or hurt.
accuracy
Check small errors in writing: spacing, punctuation, and agreement (for example, 'reduces' not 'reduce' with 'every staff member').
coherence
Use linking words to move ideas steadily from one point to the next to boost flow.
task response
The essay keeps a clear position on the issue.
structure
The structure is clear: intro, two body parts, and a conclusion.
lexical
An example from real life (nurses) helps support the point.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unity
  • team spirit
  • dress code
  • professional appearance
  • confidence
  • clients
  • brand identity
  • recognizable
  • individuality
  • personal expression
  • uncomfortable
  • impractical
  • financial burden
  • resistance
  • dissatisfaction
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