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in the modern world it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via the internet and live without any face-to-face contact with others. Show advantages and disadvantages

Society has undergone many changes , and that includes how
people
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 communicate and
work
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. Nowadays, technology has made it easier to communicate ,
work
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 and shop online . Today, communication in the virtual world is more common than
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 real world .
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 essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of
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 topic . On the one hand , there are many advantages to doing everything online . First , the internet is very convenient.
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 of communicating face-to-face, everyone can chat online.
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 , working online by computer will let
people
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 save time . Second , using the internet will make
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's lives flexible .
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 , they can
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 or study any time without strict schedules .
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, they will not have a specific time to adhere to.
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, everybody can have opportunities.
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 can
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 for companies in other countries .
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, they can take online courses and speak to
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 from different countries .
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,
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 , there are several disadvantages
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 doing everything online . First , that can cause health problems .
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 , when somebody sits all day, that can cause headaches .
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 , they will have less physical activity . Second , their communication skills will be poor . When they communicate online, it will be difficult for them to talk with
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face-to-faceface
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face-to-face
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, their social skills will be weak .
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,
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's
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 will be imbalanced . Sometimes , they have
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 at home , and they
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 do some tasks online . Some
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 can not balance their
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 and their personal life . In conclusion, there are a number of excellent advantages of communicating and doing everything through technology.
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, there are some drawbacks , and in some
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 the best option is in person.

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content
Make a clear view of the topic in the first line. State you will talk about good and bad sides.
structure
Each paragraph should have a main idea at the start. Use a simple topic sentence.
content
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grammar
Check grammar, verb tense, and article use. Watch for word order.
grammar
Use punctuation correctly: commas to separate items; avoid run-on lines.
structure
The essay has an introduction and a conclusion.
cohesion
Uses 'First', 'Second', 'Finally' to link ideas.
content
Gives both sides (pros and cons).
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