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The diagram shows a method of shaping glass containers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows a method of shaping glass containers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The process
give
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gives
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 key information about the formation of
glass
Use synonyms
 boxes, and how many stages take
a
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apply
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place in generating
Use synonyms
glass
Correct article usage
a glass
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 case.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that
this
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 is an intricate operation, and
take
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takes
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 about eight steps from the beginning to the end.
According to
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 what is seen, the first phase
start
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starts
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at put
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by putting
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 a small powder of
glass
Use synonyms
 in the furnace at 105
degree
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degrees
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.
Then
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,
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this
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these
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 granules
becomes
Correct subject-verb agreement
become
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as
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apply
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a piece of fire
,
Punctuation problem
;
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therefore
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, the hot
glass
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 should
pouring
Wrong verb form
be poured
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in
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into
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specific
Correct article usage
a specific
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mold
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mould
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 and
pressing
Wrong verb form
pressed
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 into it. In the third term, the
glass
Use synonyms
 will
takes
Wrong verb form
take
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 the shape of
temple
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a temple
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 and the wall will be hard.
Afterthat
Correct your spelling
After that
, open the
cast
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case
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 to natural air to take it out.
Subsequently
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,
thick
Correct article usage
the thick
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container
Fix the agreement mistake
containers
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drive
Wrong verb form
are driven
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 to a hot oven at 482
degree
Fix the agreement mistake
degrees
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 to form the final shape and smooth the
edge
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edges
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 of the containers. At the
border
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apply
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end of the production, over temperature should
reduce
Wrong verb form
be reduced
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it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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to 25
degree
Fix the agreement mistake
degrees
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, which
make
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makes
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 hand
labours
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labourers
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 separate the waste items in
designated
Correct article usage
the designated
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 bin, and
packed
Wrong verb form
pack
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an
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apply
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excellent cans.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words glass with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Container
  • Melting furnace
  • Molten glass
  • Gob
  • Conveyor belt
  • Mold
  • Cooling
  • Annealing
  • Finishing touches
  • Quality inspection
  • Packaging
  • Distribution
  • Automated
  • Environmental impact
  • Temperature control
  • Glassware
  • Manufacturing process
  • Perfection
  • Impurities
  • Recycling
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