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In many countries ,not enough students are choosing to study science subjects at university. Why is this happening ? What effects does it have on society?

In recent years, the number of
learners
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 who select to learn
science
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subjects
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 has decreased significantly.Lack of interest and challenges that students encounter in the process of studying can be compelling reasons for
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 several repercussions in the
country
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. One incentive that leads
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 engaged in
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 is that young
learners
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 are reluctant to study
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 as chemistry and biology.They consider these
subjects
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 to be dull to study , as teachers at school do not use interactive methods in teaching.As long as educators create new and enthralling approaches to teach,
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 can have a passion
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 learning them. Another factor that should be mentioned is difficulty . It is widely known that chemistry is a subject which involves numerous elements and daunting tasks
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,not all individuals are capable of implementing them. Witnessing challenges
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 prefer to alter their
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education.
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 condition ought not to be neglected, as it impacts
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society negatively.The primary ramification is that it affects
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the development of the state. In
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 fast-paced world,every field is evolving instantly all over the globe.If youngsters of the
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 are not well-versed
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science
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,
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country
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 can not make innovations in the spheres of medicine and technology,influencing even the lives of citizens.
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 , there is a
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likelihood
 of declining the life expectancy of the residents , because of inadequate knowledge in
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 field.Since the governments do not have professionals to
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their
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 citizens , the health of the population might be under threat. In conclusion,students are not passionate about learning
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 boring lessons and difficulties they face ,yet
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 should be addressed as soon as possible, since being ignorant in scientific
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pose
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 a threat to the development of the
country
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 and
life
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the life
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 span of the individuals.

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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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