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The bar chart shows the petroleum production and consumption among 7 regions in 2002.

The bar chart shows the petroleum production and consumption among 7 regions in 2002.
The diagram depicts the
petroleum
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production
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 and consumption
amang
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among
 7 regions
including
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, including
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 Australia, Asia, and
other
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the other
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 five regions
in
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, in
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 2002.
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,
Europe
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 had the most
petroleum
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 consumption in 2002,
while
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 Africa and
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Middle
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the Middle
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 East had the least
petroleum
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consunmption
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consumption
. What's more,
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Middle
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the Middle
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 East was the
dominante
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dominant
 region that contributed to
petroleum
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production
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,
and
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apply
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followed by
Europe
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,
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in contrast
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, there was the least
petroleum
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production
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 in Australia and Asia. Generally, the
production
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 had nothing to do with the consumption in a single region. Looking at the chart in more
details
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, we can see there was approximately 25,000,000
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barrele
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barrels
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petroleum
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of petroleum
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consuption
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consumption
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day
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 in
Europe
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, which was the most and followed by the US with the figure of 15,000,000
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barrele
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barrels
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petroleum
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of petroleum
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consuption
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consumption
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day
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. The reverse is the case when it comes to Africa and
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Middle
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the Middle
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 East
with
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 the figure of about 3,000,000
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barrele
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barrels
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petroleum
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of petroleum
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counsumption
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consumption
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day
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.
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, there was the most
petrolleum
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petroleum
production
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 of around 18,000,000
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barrele
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barrels
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day
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 in
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Middle
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the Middle
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 East, and it was closely followed by
Europe
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 with the figure of 16,000,000
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barrele
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barrels
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day
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. The opposite is true when we look at the
petroleum
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production
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 in Australia and Asia, which had about 4,000,000
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barrele
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barrels
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day
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words petroleum, production, europe, middle, barrele, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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