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Traffic congestion is a serious problem in many countries around the world. Describe the situation in your home country and suggest some solutions.

The most crucial problem faced by
the
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governments
are
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the
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traffic
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congestion
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,
it
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 is one of the most serious issues in many nations around the globe. The countries are facing various
crisis
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likewise
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, air
pollution
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,
increase
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use
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 of private
vechiles
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vehicles
, the
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. The
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 solution for
it
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this
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 is the
governments
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government's
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 collaboration in developing excellent infrastructure, and public awareness to make
use
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 of public
transportation
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.
This
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 essay sheds light on causes and solutions for
traffic
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congestion
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 in various cities. To commence, earlier the major route of commuting was public
transportation
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, but
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 insufficiency and inconvenience, more and more people
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 to
pravite
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private
 vehicles,
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 tendency not only
leding
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led
 to
,
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traffic
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congestion
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 , but
also
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pollution
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.
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, about 2 decades
before
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, the number of cars
were
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 less
,
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;
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however
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, today
has
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it has
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 increased to 5 fold more.
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,
this
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 heavy
traffic
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have
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utilising
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utilised
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 lots of time in
transportation
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,
as well as
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,
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 causing
for
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mental stress,
thus
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traffic
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congestion
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had
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has
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 created various
problem
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problems
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to
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 the cities.
On the contrary
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,
this
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 can be tackled mostly by
goverments
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governments
,
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 by people.
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, the
government
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 should construct highways, subways and underground roadways, which will be an alternative solution for avoiding
traffic
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congestion
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.
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, the
government
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 should encourage people to
use
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 more public
transportation
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, like public
bus
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buses
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, metros and car
polling
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pooling
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,
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this
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aid
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aids
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 in reducing the number of vehicles
in
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 the road,
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,
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reduce
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reducing
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 the travelling time.
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 city like Doha
the
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, the
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government
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 is
knee
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keen
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in
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on
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 building new routes of
transportation
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 and developing more public
transportation
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. In conclusion,
although
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 with
advance
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advanced
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 technology
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traffic
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, traffic
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congestion
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 is a prime issue for
pollution
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 ,
this
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 can be easily handled by
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government
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the government
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 by developing the most
advance
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advanced
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 infrastructure, and
also
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 motivating the public
make
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to make
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use
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 of public
transportation
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,
then
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 only we can solve the problem of
pollution
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 and
traffic
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congestion
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.

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language
Fix big mistakes in spelling and word form.
structure
Put one idea in each paragraph and start with a clear topic line.
content
Give more clear detail for causes and for the fixes, with short examples.
content
Some ideas are easy to see.
content
The essay shows a view that action by government is needed.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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