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The table gives information about the water use in three sectors in six countries.

The table gives information about the water use in three sectors in six countries.
The table compares the proportion of
water
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 consumption for domestic, agricultural, and industrial purposes across six nations in 2003.
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, it is evident
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that the
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 three sectors showed
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divergent patterns of
water
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 use. Canada recorded the highest consumption in agriculture,
whereas
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 Germany registered the lowest figure in
domestic
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the domestic
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feild
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field
.
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, France uses the largest amount of
water
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 for industrial purposes. For
agreculture
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agriculture
 use, Canada accounted for
highest
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the highest
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 figure at around 50%,
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contrast
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contrast,
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 it registered the lowest proportion of
water
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utilization
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utilisation
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 at approximately 10%, for domestic purposes. Meanwhile, Germany exceeded
this
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 ratio by almost 30%, making it the highest
water
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 usage. France
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apply
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 recorded the greatest
water
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 intake level in
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the industrail
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industrail
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industrial
section
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sector
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 at around 40%.
On the other hand
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, the UK comes in
seconed postion
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second position
 after France and Germany for
water
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 consumption in both sectors, the domestic and industrial
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, at
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 around 35%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption patterns
  • agricultural sector
  • industrial water use
  • domestic water consumption
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • disparities
  • efficiency
  • sustainability
  • government policies
  • managing
  • regulating
  • regions
  • factors influencing
  • comparative analysis
  • water resources
  • resource management
  • sector-specific use
  • data comparison
  • water scarcity
  • usage trends
  • conservation efforts
  • allocation of resources
  • water footprint
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