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Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the two graphs below.

The two pie charts illustrate the highest level of
education
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 attained by
women
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 in Someland in 1945 and 1995. In 1945, the most common educational levels were No Schooling and Third Grade, each accounting for 35% of
women
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.
Year
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 6
education
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 was achieved by 15% of
women
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,
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 10% reached
Year
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 9. A mere 4% of
women
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 completed
Year
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 12, and only 1% obtained a First Degree. Notably, there were no
women
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 with a Postgraduate qualification in 1945. By 1995, significant changes had occurred. The proportion of
women
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 with No Schooling and
Third Grade
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third-grade
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education
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 dropped to 0%, indicating the elimination of these low educational levels. First Degree became the most prevalent, with half (50%) of
women
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 achieving
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. Both
Year
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 12 and Postgraduate qualifications were held by 20% of
women
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 each. The percentage of
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 with
Year
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 9
education
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 remained unchanged at 10%,
while
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Year
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 6
education
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also
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 fell to 0%.
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, between 1945 and 1995, there was a dramatic shift towards higher educational attainment among
women
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 in Someland, with a substantial increase in university-level and postgraduate
education
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, and a complete disappearance of no schooling and lower-grade
education
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.

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The report is clear on what the charts show. Keep this, and add a short clear view at the start of the report to set the aim.
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Name the charts and what data you use, then give a brief trend line from 1945 to 1995.
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Use simple link words to show compare, such as 'while', 'but', 'and', 'then', to show how things change.
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Make sure you give exact numbers for both charts in the same way.
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The end should wrap up with one clear idea, like 'Overall, the big rise is from X to Y.'
data use
Strong use of exact percentages for both years.
overview
A clear end with a big view of the change.
structure
A steady flow from 1945 data to 1995 data.
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