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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar graph illustrates information about how household in a specific nation spent their
7 days
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7-day
income
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 in 2018 compared to 1968.
Overall
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, it can be seen that, majority of weekly
income
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 was spent
for
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on
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 food in 1968,
whereas
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 in 2018,
majority
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the majority
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 of weekly
earning
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earnings
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was
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were
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 spent
for
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on
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 leisure
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purpose
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purposes
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. In 1968, for food
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purpose
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purposes
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, families spent
majority
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the majority
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 of their
earning
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earnings
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, which was around 35% of their total
income
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. After that, clothing and
footware
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footwear
was
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were
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 the category where
household
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households
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 spent
most
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the most
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 from their
income
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 (approximately 10
percentage
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per cent
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). In household goods, personal goods and transport
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purpose
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purposes
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, families
were
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apply
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spent around
same
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the same
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 amount, which accounts for close to 8%.
In
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For
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 fuel and power
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purpose
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purposes
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, families
were
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apply
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spent the lowest amount
from
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of
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 their
income
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 in 1968. In 2018, leisure
constitutes
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constituted
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 the highest expenditure
in
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apply
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2018, which was increased by more than double
,
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apply
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 compared to 1968,
whereas
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 spending in
food
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the food
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 section saw a drastic drop, from approximately 35% to 18%.
Also
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, spending on housing increased by almost twice, which is quite natural as housing
price
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prices
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is
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are
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 increasing year by year.
Additionally
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,
spent
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spending
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 on transport was escalated, from around 8% to 14%. For other purposes,
for instance
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;
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,
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 fuel and power, clothing and
footware
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footwear
, personal goods
spent percentage
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percentage spent
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 remained less than 5%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, purpose with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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