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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.
the
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 figure depicts the process
to manufacture
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of manufacturing
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 instant noodles. From an
overall
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 perspective, it can be seen that there are eight stages from
storaging
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storing
 flour to labelling and sealing the cups. Almost
of
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the
process
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entire process
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which
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, which
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 is eight
stages
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stages,
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use
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 the autonomous machine and
combine
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combines
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by
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water and oil. First of all, flour which transported by truck
keeps
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is kept
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 in storage silos. The second
stage
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, flour from storage will be combined by mixer
adding
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, adding
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with
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water and oil. After that, the results from
mixing
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the mixing
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stage
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 turn into dough sheets by rollers.
Next
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The next
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stage
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 is to make the dough sheets become dough strips
which
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, which
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one
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is one
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stages
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stage
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 before producing noodle discs. The following
stage
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 is cooking
noodle
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noodles
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 with oil, after several
time
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times
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 it must be dried. The noodle which have been in
cup
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the cup
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 is added
by
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to
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 vegetables and spices.
At the end
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in
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of
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machine
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the machine
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 process, the cups
is
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are
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 not only labelled but
also
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 sealed.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words stage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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