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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
At
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In
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this
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graph
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graph,
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 we can see different metals and how
they
Correct pronoun usage
their
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price
Correct subject-verb agreement
prices
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changing
Verb problem
are changing
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. The first
graph
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 I see
it
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apply
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is about nickel, we can see
this
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grap
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graph
 is not
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stability
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stable
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, because in the period between January and
March
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March,
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 have a fall in
average
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the average
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price
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.
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this
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this,
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 all spring have mostly
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stability
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stable
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graph
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graphs
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, but between May and
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June
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June,
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 nickel
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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 a big fall again.
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Graph
Correct article usage
The graph
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have
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has
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 a
sudenly
Correct your spelling
sudden
increase
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 in the period of
June
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 and July. Between July and
September
Punctuation problem
September,
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 we can see the
stabilization
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stabilisation
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 of
price
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 for
this
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 metal, but
after
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this
Linking Words
graph
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has
Verb problem
shows
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 little
changes
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change
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 it is
fall
Correct article usage
a fall
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 in
price
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. Between October and
November
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November,
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 nickel has
a
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an
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increase
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,
after
Linking Words
this
Linking Words
 we can see
stability
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 again. Copper has a mostly
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stability
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stable
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graph
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, but between January and May has a down in
price
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, but
in
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at
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 the start of summer
between
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, between
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June
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 and
July
Punctuation problem
July,
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 has a
little
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slight
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increase
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. After
September
Punctuation problem
September,
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 we can see the
non stabity
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non-stability
 situation in
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graph
Correct article usage
the graph
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 because
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price
Correct article usage
the price
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 has some
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increase
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increases
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 and lower. Zinc’s
graph
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 has
first
Correct article usage
a first
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increase
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 between January and February,
after
Linking Words
Linking Words
Correct pronoun usage
which this
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this
Correct determiner usage
the
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price
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has
Verb problem
apply
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a
Correct article usage
apply
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change
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changes
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 like down in
price
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 between February and
June
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. In the summer
price
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 has a more
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stability
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stable
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graph
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,
after
Linking Words
Linking Words
this
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this,
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 we can see
the
Correct article usage
a
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slightly
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slight
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 low in
price
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, and between October and December
some
Punctuation problem
, some
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increase
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 in
price
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "after this".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, price, stability, june, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stability" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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