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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Life has changed a great deal, especially in the environment.
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 includes how governments and individuals make a difference.
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 , some people agree with the individual changes
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 others agree with the governments and the large companies. Both of them have significant changes. On one hand, in terms of the agreements,
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 the given data, there are several agreements.
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the government provides the new methods at a low cost.
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 makes the goal become smart and active.
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, the water area needs a modern way.
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, the local tree approach is another way to make a wonderful garden.
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 organisation will improve the health area .
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, all these points support the upside and the positive part.
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, in terms of disagreements,
according to
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 the new reports, there are many disagreements.
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the cost is high.
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 is
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 a low level of personal outcome. The high cost of the park and the decoration are the prime examples.
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the hard plan decreases the rate of
the
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achieving the
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 positive goal.
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 will make the park harmful.
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, the location of the car park needs a trendy type.
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, all these points improve the drawbacks and the negative parts. In conclusion,
according to
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 the given notes, there are many benefits.
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, there are many hard points.
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, the government recommend people follow the right tips for positive results and a better life.
Although
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 there are many outcomes and incomes, I prefer the agreement features.

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task response
Be clear in your view. Say if you agree or disagree and how much.
coherence
Use a clear plan: intro, 2 body parts for ideas, and a short end.
task response
Give one or two clear examples to back your points.
language
Work on grammar and choice of words. Use simple words to be correct.
structure
The essay tries to talk about both sides.
coherence
Link words like 'On the one hand' help flow.
content
There is a closing line.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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