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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

Write a letter to a transport office about a problem with the transportation system in your area. •Describe the situation you are facing •Why do you consider it a problem •What change you would like to recommend.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to draw your attention to an issue with the transportation system in my
surrounding
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surroundings
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.
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 obstacle requires attention because it has been bothering a lot of people.
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 with, the frequency of
bus
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buses
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 is less compared to the
number
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 of passengers .
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, a lot of riders are not even able to get
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apply
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access to the bus on their required time.
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,
more
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a larger
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number
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 of
person
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people
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 are getting boarded on the vehicle as compared to the
number
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 of seats.
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 results in
congested
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a congested
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 situation inside the bus where some people would be travelling in a standing posture during the whole journey. I would appreciate it if you could increase the
number
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 of buses for
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 route to
accomodate
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accommodate
 all the passengers
conviniently
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conveniently
. If needed, I am available for
phone
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a phone
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 call to provide any
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 details. I kindly request that
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 matter be resolved as soon as possible. Thank you for your attention and cooperation. I look forward to your prompt response. Yours faithfully, Dhruvil Patel

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grammar/structure
In this letter, make one clear aim in each paragraph. Use simple words and short lines. Put the problem first, then a clear fix.
structure
Use one idea per paragraph. Start with a statement of the issue, then give a solution. End with a polite closing.
tone
The tone is polite and formal. Keep it formal all through. Use standard openings like 'Dear Sir/Madam' and 'Yours faithfully'.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar: 'surrounding' -> 'area around', 'accomodate' -> 'accommodate', 'conveniently' -> 'conveniently', etc.
content
Be more precise about the route and time if you can. This helps to show a clear request.
tone
Polite tone and clear opening/closing.
content
Clear goal: ask for more buses on the route.
structure
Structure with intro, problem, suggestion, closing.
content
Willing to give more details if asked.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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