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Band 6.5

Topic: The given graph shows the past and projected figures of the government spending as a percentage of GDP for the years 2000 to 2025 in three areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph illustrates the past and projected figures of the government spending as a percentage of GDP from 200 to 2025 in three categories.
Overall
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, it was clear that the health category increased gradually and reached a peak of over 7% in 2025,
while
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 it was the lowest proportion
Punctuation problem
, as
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as
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at
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 4% in 2000.
Initially
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, the education type had the highest percentage with 5% in 2000.
Moreover
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, the category had an equal percentage with roads and railways areas two times
Correct determiner usage
that as
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as
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 2005 and 2020.
However
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, the education type dropped gradually after 2005.
On the other hand
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, the road railway type generally fluctuated. It peaked at around 4% and 5% in 2005. After that year, it significantly dropped and hit a low of %3 in 2010.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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