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The graph below provides information on the number of student from the US, UK, and Australia who studied in other countries between 2002 and 2008. Write a report describing the main trends shown in the graph and making comparisons where relevant.

The graph illustrates information on the
number
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 of pupils from three different countries
such
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 as US,
UK
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the UK
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, and Australia
who
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, who
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study
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studied
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 abroad from 2002 to 2008.
Overall
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, Australia’s students were the most
dominated
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dominant
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 learners in foreign countries in
this
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 graph.
Furthermore
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, British students were in the second position, but
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at
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in
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 the end, they became much higher than
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number
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the number
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 of Americans.
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Australian
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Australians
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 have been the
higher rank
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highest-ranking
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citizen
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citizens
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 who
study
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studied
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 abroad
since
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from
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 2002
until
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to
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 2008. In the First year in
2002
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2002,
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 Australia
has
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had
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 a significant
increased
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increase
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number
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apply
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from 50000 to 60000.
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However
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However,
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 in the second year, Australia
also
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 have decreased
significant
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significantly
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apply
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number
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, since 2004
Australian
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 learners growth with
stable
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a stable
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number
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 until 2008 with
hinger
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a higher
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 rank position. UK
since
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from
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 2004 to 2008
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experienced rapidly
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rapidly
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rapid
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 growth without
significant
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a significant
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number
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.
However
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 American
citizen
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citizens
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 has
significant
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significantly
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 increased
also
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 decreased
in
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from
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 2002 to 2008. Second year Americans
has
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have
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a significant
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significant
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significantly
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 increased
number
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more
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of more
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 than 50000
student
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students
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, so
closed
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close
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with
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to
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Australian
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 learners.
However
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,
USA
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the USA
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in
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from
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 2004 to 2006 has significantly decreased. In 2008 USA
be
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was in
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 the smallest position and
UK
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the UK
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 in between
by
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apply
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Australian
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Australia
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 and
American
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the USA
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, australian with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 6 times.
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