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These days, people prefer to throw damaged items away, while in the past, they used to repair and use things for a long time. Why do you think this change has happened? What are the effects of this change?

Nowadays, individuals prefer to dispose
broken
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of broken
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 items
away
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,
while
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 in the past, many
people
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 tended to repair and use their belongings for a long period. The following paragraphs will outline the changed habits and state the results of
this
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 transition.
To begin
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 with, individuals believe that it is more convenient and practical
ways
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apply
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to dispose
the
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of the
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 broken goods as it
become
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becomes
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 difficult to find someone who has
a
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the
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 capability to repair them. To illustrate, it was very common in a city with the existence of
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a shoes
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shoes
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shoe
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 service tailor,
while
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 in the modern era, it
becomes
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has become
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 hard to discover
such
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job
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a job
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 in
the
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apply
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society as many
people
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 are now working in corporate companies, not in
a
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apply
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conventional jobs.
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, the best choice
of
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in
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this
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 case is
discard
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to discard
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 the items and repurchase new ones, to make
simple life
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life simple
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.
Moreover
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,
this
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 occurrence has
lead
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 to negative outcomes,
such
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 as damaging the environment and creating consumerist
habit
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habits
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. There have been numerous cases
that
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where
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 the waste
come
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comes
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 from unbroken
item
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items
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, which is dangerous for
environment
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the environment
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 as the products are difficult to break down naturally.
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, the consumerist habit will occur to individuals as they always
repurchse
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repurchase
 goods continuously.
This
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 condition will lead to
negatives
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negative
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 results in terms of money management. All in all, the reasons behind the
people
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 transformations are supported by some social and practical factors. At the same
times
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time
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, it brings significant negative consequences to the
environtment
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environment
.
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, it is crucial for
people
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 to be more aware of the impacts and support the environment for a better
live
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life
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 in the near future.

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planning
Plan your write before you start. List main idea and how you will explain them.
cohesion
Use simple link words to join ideas: first, also, then, but, so.
development
Give more detail. Explain your reasons and effects more clearly.
grammar
Check grammar: use correct verb forms, plural and articles.
content
Idea stays on the topic.
structure
There is a clear start, middle and end.
examples
Some good example and clear points are given.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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