The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should How the Unemployed Spend their Time, UK, last year

The table illustrates how the UK unemployed spent their leisure
time
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last
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year. The units are
mearused
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measured
in percentages. The table is
devided
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divided
into both genders and four sections
and
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, and
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showed
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shows
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different
activites
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activities
,
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.
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those
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The
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four sections are
,
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apply
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morning men who
spent
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spend
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half their
time
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either looking for a job, shopping,
staying
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or staying
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in bed,
while
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the other 50 per cent
was
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is
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for
verious
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various
activities.
morning
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Morning
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women
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spent 49% of their
time
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houseworking and only 16%
for
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on
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job hunting.
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on
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On
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the other hand,
afternoon
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the afternoon
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focused their
time
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more
into
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on
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visting
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visiting
friends or relatives.
afternoon
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Afternoon
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women
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never stayed in their beds nor played sports, compared to the
women
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in
morning
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the morning
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who spent 9%
into
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in
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the same two
activites
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activities
. Gardening,decorating,and playing sports are all fields dominated by men in general.
while
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housework is the only field dominated by
women
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. But when we look at timing
regradless
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regardless
of gender, we see
afternoon
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that afternoon
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people tend to do nothing or drink more than day people.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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