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In some countries, there has been a decline in the amount of volunteer work. Many people believe that governments should require everyone to complete a certain amount of community service. Do you think volunteering should be made mandatory, or should it remain optional?

Some countries are experiencing a decrease in
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. Most
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 say that the
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obtain
 a certain amount of community service for
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 advantages and disadvantages of mandatory
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 they don't have the ability to show up that day to attend the mandatory
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 must choose if they want to do
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 or not
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 is all about positivity and hope.
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 get to have a choice,
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 it is a positive thing to do, but we should respect
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 can help with mental health
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 in shape and productive.
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, mandatory
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 can be a positive thing for
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 always gives me hope and brings back the life out of
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 world, that's why
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 needs to
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 together to keep the community safe and productive. In conclusion, I think
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 topic has its advantages and disadvantages; if students or even working
people
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 can
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 for a minimum of 1 hour,
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 would change their lifestyle and their mental health. Volunteering
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 has a lot of benefits to our health and how productive we as humans can be, so I do support volunteering
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, but I don't support it being mandatory.

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grammar
Use short sentences. Put ideas in a simple order and link them with easy words.
content
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language
Use transition words like first, also, but, so to show how ideas are linked.
task response
The writer shows a view and talks about both sides.
coherence
Some ideas are clear and kept simple.
lexical
Easy to read with simple word use.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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