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The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph illustrates the proportion of
waste
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 produced by three different companies over a period of 15 years, from 2000 to 2015. Both companies A and
B
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 have lowered the amount of
waste
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 they produced over the years,
while
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company
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 C has roughly tripled its pollution.
To begin
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 with, it is obvious that on average, both companies A and
B
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 have a decline (from 12 and 6.85
tonnes
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 to 3 and 6.8
tonnes
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) over the period,
while
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company
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 C has dramatically increased its
waste
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 from 3.3
tonnes
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 to roughly 9.5
tonnes
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. Meanwhile,
company
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 C shares the same statistics
with
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as
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 both
company
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B
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 in 2010 (6.3
tonnes
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) and
company
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 A (6.9
tonnes
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) in September 2012.
In addition
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, in the year 2000,
company
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B
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 was increasing their
waste
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 amount, but right after
2005
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2005,
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 it dropped and reached its lowest record in 2015.
On the other hand
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,
while
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 the total volume of
waste
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 from
company
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 A
,
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 decreased over time, they still have the peak ratio of pollution after 15 years (12
tonnes
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 in 2000).

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, b, company, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • significant changes
  • increase
  • decrease
  • waste production
  • period
  • compare
  • analyze
  • main features
  • highlight
  • decline
  • rise
  • steady
  • variations
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