The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The
provided two maps
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two maps provided
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illustrate how
road
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access developed to a city hospital in 2010 compared to 2007.
Overall
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, it can be seen that significant changes were made in the
south
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southern
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part of the map in 2010 to
made
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make
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smooth access by the various transports. In 2007,
total
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a total
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of six bus stops were situated
both
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on both
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side
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sides
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of the hospital
road
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that
lead
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leads
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to
hospital
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the hospital
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. There was a car park in the southeastern
area
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of the map
that
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is
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was
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used by staff of
hospital
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the hospital
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and
public
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the public
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, which was linked with the ring
road
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.
On the other hand
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, in 2010, a designated
area
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was allocated for the bus, located in the southwestern
area
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of the map, which was connected with both
ring
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the ring
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road
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and
city
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the city
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road
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. Previously,
car
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cars
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of staff and
public
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the public
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were parked in the same
area
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, but in 2010, separate parking was made for the
car
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cars
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of staff and
public
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the public
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, and both were linked
with
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to
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ring
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the ring
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road
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road, area with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • road access
  • city hospital
  • traffic flow
  • public transport facilities
  • intersection
  • roundabout
  • car park
  • dedicated
  • modifications
  • congestion
  • accessibility
  • hospital entrance
  • parking areas
  • main features
  • signage
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