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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shop that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart provides key information about the
figure
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number
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 of stores that closed, and other
shops
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has
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have
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 been opened in one nation over the period from 2011 and 2018. The units are measured by
number
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the number
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 of storehouses.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the majority of
shops
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have been
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were
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 closed in 2015,
while
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 the peak rates of opening were in 2014.
According to
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 what is shown, the closed
marts
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markets
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 began with around 6500 bazaars.
Then
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, it shows
a
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apply
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fluctuated
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 rates until 2014,
it dropped
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dropping
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 to slightly under 1000 stores. In terms of 2016, the indicators of closed
shops
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has
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have
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 jumped to about 5000
shops
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. In terms of openings, at the beginning, the trades have positive patterns compared to the end of
term
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the term
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, despite
the started
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starting
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 with significant rates at more than 8500 markets in 2011, but
latter
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later
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 it has plunged rapidly to 4000
,
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.
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Next,
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it represented a
flactuated
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fluctuating
 number until the end of
term
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the term
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,
it
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and it
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 decreased to 3000 outlets.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • fluctuation
  • correlation
  • inverse relationship
  • notable
  • comparable
  • speculate
  • external factors
  • increment
  • decrement
  • overall
  • composite
  • linear
  • net gain
  • net loss
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