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The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The main reason for existing
science
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 is to develop the quality of
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lives
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.Scientists have a potential opportunity for future generations to improve their
lives
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. Like all humans, with their bad and good attempts. First of all, I strongly agree with
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science
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 and technology should be beneficial to society all around the world. As scientists create or develop usable devices,
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 should be helpful for all individuals.
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, clever
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 create artificial intelligence
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 the most popular nowadays is ChatGPT. It provides
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significant
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and useful
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 information about almost everything in the world,
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, a great number of individuals have the opportunity to learn from
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incredible instrument to improve their
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, there might be some
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 who would complain about the benefits of
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 for a better life for all humanity. Some
people
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 would argue about the magnificent effect of technology which scientists have created in recent years.
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, if
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 use ChatGPT on a daily basis to solve all their problems, they can lose the ability of
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thinking
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and
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 to manage difficulties in the future.
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, it can cause a lot of issues for younger generations to apply for work
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 a great number of workplaces will decrease because of artificial intelligence. In conclusion, I believe that
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 will make society’s life easier than right now. Even with some unpleasant consequences, they would
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 a great effect on
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structure
Make your main point clear in the first paragraph and say how much you agree.
coherence
Link ideas better between each part. Use small links like 'also', 'then', 'but' to show how ideas go together.
content
Give more strong proof or examples. Explain more on how science helps life in many ways.
grammar
Check grammar for small errors. Phrases like 'a significant useful information' should be 'a lot of useful information' and 'the most popular nowadays is ChatGPT' could be 'ChatGPT is very popular now'.
style
Use simple, short sentences. This makes your ideas clear and easy to read.
task response
You take a clear stand and feel strongly for the view.
coherence
You use linking words to show how ideas grow.
content
You give a real example with AI like ChatGPT to show a point.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • enhancing
  • quality of human life
  • advancements
  • medicine
  • healthcare
  • scientific research
  • solving societal problems
  • improving living standards
  • global issues
  • climate change
  • food scarcity
  • technological advancements
  • limitations
  • negative consequences
  • ethical considerations
  • sustainability
  • environmental preservation
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