Discussion question: Is it better to rent an apartment or buy a house?

I think some people select
that
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living
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live
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in
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rent
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rented
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apartmenst
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apartments
and
this
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is better than purchasing a
house
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,even if both have some advantages.In my opinion, purchasing
residense
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residence
will be important in your life
for
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they can live
free
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and they can go there which you want time Another reason is that people
selecting
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select
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that
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they
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purchase a
residense
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residence
.Because,if you buy it, you can sell it to another person or you can install
variety
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various
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equipments
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equipment
. You will buy various
furnitures
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furniture
which your home
will be
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unique. You give
which
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what
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you purchase
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house
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a house
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when you
will be
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are
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old
and
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, and
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you have your personal home. Of course,
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rent
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renting
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apartments will be cheaper than purchasing
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house
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a house
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and
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, and
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There
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there
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are amenities of
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house
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a house
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. You live
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rent
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in rented
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flats which you want somewhere.But,I think
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won’t be convenient for all.Because
,
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some amenities are limited there. In conclusion, I prefer purchasing
home
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a home
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because
this
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is
important
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an important
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part of life for all. I know that some individuals choose
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rent
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to rent
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apartments, but for me, buying homes are their in their life.

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task response
Plan the essay before you write. Start with a clear idea. Then add 2 or 3 reasons with simple and short examples.
coherence
Make a proper intro, body with two ideas, and a short conclusion. Use linking words like also, but, and so.
coherence
Use simple paragraphs. Each paragraph has one main idea. Use topic sentences.
grammar
Check grammar and spell common errors in small steps. Use correct spell for 'apartment', 'residence', 'purchase'.
lexical resource
Build a small range of words. Use only words you know well. Avoid hard words you are not sure of.
content
You show balance by presenting both sides, and you end with your view.
structure
Your idea that owning a home gives freedom is clear to the reader.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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