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Writing Samples
Band 4

Part 1.2 Write a letter to the library manager . Give your opinion and suggest alternative activities or services during the closure

Dear
sir
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Sir
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, Thank you for your email . I understand that
library
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the library
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 must close for three
monts
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months
. It is good that
will
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you will
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 repair the building and put new novels and other action books, but
i
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I
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 feel myself little bit sad because
i
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I
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 like
go to
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to go
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 here every day . I think maybe you can make some online lessons when the bookstore is closed.
This
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 can help students continue
read
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to read
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never
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and never
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 stop . And,
i
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I
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 hope can change some things in the library . The
electrcity
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electricity
 sometimes
not
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does not
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 work
good
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well
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. Maybe
also
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 put a lot of books
instead
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other
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of other
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 novels in
this
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 area . Replace the old places with new novels. Thank you for your attention to our opinion . Thank you for your attention to our opinion. I hope everything goes well and that we can come back soon. Best wishes, Kamolxon

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task response
Your view is clear but add more detail. Say what you want the library to do while it is closed, and how this helps students.
task response
Plan your ideas. For example, suggest a plan for online lessons and more books, with steps to take.
coherence
To help with flow, place one idea in each paragraph and use simple linking words like 'also', 'but', 'then'.
coherence
To keep a good order, start with why the library will close, then what you want, and how to act.
tone
Polite and kind tone.
tone
Clear start and end to the letter.
content
Shows care for readers and asks for help.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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