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Some are of the opinion that people are naturally born as good leaders while others feel that leadership skills can be learned. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is argued that
an
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every
individuals
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individual
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born
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is born
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 as a great
leader
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,
while
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 others believe
,
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apply
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to become
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that becoming
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 a
leader
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require
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requires
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 numerous processes. In my opinion, some
people
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 are
inborn
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born
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 as
a
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great
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leader
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leaders
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 and
some
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others need
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experiences
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experience
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 and
knowledges
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knowledge
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 from several sources. In
this
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 I will discuss both viewpoints and give my personal opinions. First of all, some
people
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 around the world are gifted with certain abilities, and one of the great
gift
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gifts
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 from the universe is
a
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apply
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leadership
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. These gifted
people
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 are naturally easy to connect to other
people
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,
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normally
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normally,
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 they are an
extrovert
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 person.
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, they
also
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 have a sense of belonging as their main value to reach many individuals.
For example
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, Prabowo Subianto, the President of
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Indonesia
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Indonesia,
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 has
leadership
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 values from
once
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when
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 he was a child. Some Sources exposed, he became the youngest army commander of
Indonesia
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 at the age of 20.
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, after he expelled
rebellion
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the rebel
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 army
at
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in
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 Papua Province in 1990, he became the youngest army general at
age
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the age
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 of 34.
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 is one of the
example
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examples
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, some
people
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born
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are born
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 with
natural
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a natural
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 gift as a
leader
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 in
Indonesia
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.
On the other hand
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,
leadership
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 can be acquired
by
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through
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 learning processes
,
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apply
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 and personal
experiences
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. Learning process is important to build
a
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apply
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leadership
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 in the future. At Schools, teacher will educate some theories and will lead their pupils to develop
a
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teamworks
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teamwork
 during classes,
for example
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. In
Indonesia
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, some private schools manage their pupils to
make
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conduct
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 an experiment with
team-based
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a team-based
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 approach to develop their soft skills.
personal
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experiences
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also
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 build
a
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great leaders,
people
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 with many
experiences
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 from their
lifes
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lives
, will
able
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be able
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 to educate and influence others with their knowledge. In conclusion,
a
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great
leadership
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 can be achieved
by
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through
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learning
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a learning
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 process and experience from educational stages. And we should
realize
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realise
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, there are many individuals
are
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apply
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born with natural
leadership
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 worldwide.

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structure
Make a clear plan: intro, view one, view two, your view, and a short end.
content
Give clear and real examples that fit the topic and use simple facts.
language
Fix grammar and spellings. Use short, clear sentences.
task
You show both sides and you give your own view.
content
There is an attempt to use an example to show a point.
idea
You try to show how born or learned leaders can be.
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