The growth of multinational companies and the resulting rise of globalization creates positive effects for all. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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and multinational
companies
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affect many
countries
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around the world. Some
people
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think these changes are good for everyone because they create opportunities,
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others think they only benefit rich
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essay will discuss both sides and give my opinion. Supporters of
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globalization
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argue that multinational
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help
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develop. They create jobs, bring new technologies, and improve local businesses.
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, when a big international company opens in a small city,
people
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can find work and learn new skills. In
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way,
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can improve the economy and
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of ordinary
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, some
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believe
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is not equally good for everyone. They argue that it mainly benefits large
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and rich
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poorer nations may face competition and lose local businesses.
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, small local shops can close because
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buy cheaper products from global
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can increase inequality and make life harder for some
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. In my opinion,
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has more benefits than disadvantages, but it is not perfect.
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it can create jobs and improve economies,
countries
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should
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protect small businesses and local industries.
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,
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can be positive if managed carefully.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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