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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates the amount of electricity (in
billion
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kWh
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)
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produced and consumed in ten
countries
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 - China, the USA, Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany, and
Korean
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Korea
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 - in 2014.
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, China and the USA produced and consumed by far the highest amount of electricity,
while
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 Korea was the least among
ten
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countries
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.
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,
German
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Germany
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 was the only country
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where
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 the amount of consumption outweighed that of production. Looking closely at the data, at 5,398 and 5,322
billion
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kWh
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, China produced and consumed more than the other
countries
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. The USA was the second-largest producer and consumer, at 4,099 and 3,866
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kWh
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, respectively. With regard to the other eight
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, Russia was the only country whose output and consumption were over 1,000
billion
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, at 1,057
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and
 1,038
billion
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kWh
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, respectively.
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, the corresponding figures for Korea were only 485.1 and 449.5
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, making it the smallest electricity-producing and consuming country. In terms of Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, and Germany, their
ouput
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output
 ranged from 526 to 937
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,
whereas
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thier
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their
 usages ranged from 455 to 856
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. It is
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 notable that
German
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Germany
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comsumed
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consumed
 more electricity than it produced, at 582.5 and 526.6
billion
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kWh
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, respectively.

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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, kwh, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • disparity
  • significant
  • top ten countries
  • main features
  • compare
  • relevant
  • geographical concentration
  • trends
  • patterns
  • implications
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