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The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The given charts illustrate the proportions of both genders involved in various household activities,
as well as
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 the amount of
time
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 each gender spends on these activities per day.
Overall
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, the percentage of
males
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 and
females
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 varies across the different tasks, which are cooking, cleaning, pet care and
house
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repairs
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, and the same applies to the average
time
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 for each task. On the one hand, the famous
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housework
 for
females
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 ae cooking and cleaning
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 82% and 62% , respectively , higher than
males
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 , 60% and 40% , respectively .
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However
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 the
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common
 tasks for
males
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 are pet care, with 22% and
house
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repairs
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with
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 18 %, higher than
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females
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for females
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, speciallyin
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speciallyin
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especially
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house
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in house
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repairs
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with
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 a proportion under 10 %
On the other hand
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, more than 65 minutes per day are dedicated to cleaning and cooking for
females
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,
whereas
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 the share for
males
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 is between 45 and 60 minutes.
Moreover
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, both genders share the same average
time
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 for pet care, at 20 minutes daily,
while
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 the
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 spent on
house
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repairs
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 for
males
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 remains higher than that of
females
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, males, females, house, repairs with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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