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The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010

The illustration
provide
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provides
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 information on the proportion of England,
wales
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Wales
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 and Scotland
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people
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apply
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handing money to charity by different ages in
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the year
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year
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years
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 1990 and 2010
Overall
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, in both years, the
number
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 of
people
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 who give charity from early ages
upto
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up to
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 50 had kept increasing. Whilst the
number
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 of older ones had decreased in both years 1990 and 2010
prespectively
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respectively
. In the year of 1990,
people
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 at the
age
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 of 36-50 won the
highst
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highest
 among the others, in
the
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apply
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contrast
young
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, young
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People
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 at the
age
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 of 18-25
is
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are
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 the lowest.
However
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, the graph is making it obvious that the late
therties
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1930s
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 and mid
sexties
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1940s
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 are the most giving to charity
the
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then
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 it drops nearly 13% In
2010
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2010,
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people
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in
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apply
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the
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apply
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age
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aged
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of
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apply
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51-65
are
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were
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 illustrated as the
highst
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highest
 with nearly 40%, in
the
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apply
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contrary
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contrast
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 to the
number
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 of
people
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 in the
age
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 of 36 to 65< in 1990
,
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;
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number
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the number
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 of
people
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 in 2010 is higher.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, number, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charity
  • give money to charity
  • donate
  • percent
  • age
  • group
  • year
  • 1990
  • 2010
  • highest
  • lowest
  • more
  • less
  • rise
  • increase
  • fall
  • decrease
  • go up
  • go down
  • stay the same
  • change
  • pattern
  • trend
  • compare
  • difference
  • overall
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