Many movies and video games contain scenes of violence. Some people believe that they should be banned, while others think they are harmless or even help people to relax. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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that several
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and
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used for leisure activities
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display violent actions, as opposed to those who believe they do not cause any harm
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on the
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, they can help people ease. I believe
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choosing the genre of
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or the class of
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the solution to
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issue. They are
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in different genres and cannot be put under one
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of the viewer or the gamer
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as to which type entertains them the most.
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and
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are a way of relaxing our body and mind. The concept was to use these entertainment resources for a short amount of time, to take a break from
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, not to make it our
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. There are
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that make us laugh, like Home Alone or
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that are educational,
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on Earth.
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, there are others that contain
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documentaries
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as
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APJ Abdul Kalam or even animals like dolphins. It is solely a matter of what we choose to watch.
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regards to videogames
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, these came with
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advancement of technology, and are currently known for their popularity.
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games
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are a great source of enhancing brain activity. Again,
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activity comes with a
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with its own limitations. Playing relaxing
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, like Mario
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or even some car racing
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not cause any harm and
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their primary purpose if used in moderation. Not all
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or
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are violent in nature, and can be
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entertaining to indulge
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true
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that with great
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competition
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range of options. Over
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the
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of
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shifted from comedy or thriller.
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like Human
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or even The
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changed the primary idea of relaxation. These motion pictures depict a
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darker side of human
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, glorifying brutality and changing the minds of
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generation.
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is depicted as heroism,
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giving criminal ideas to clean minds.
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,
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games
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like Mortal
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Kombat
or Zombie
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and the thin line between what is real and what is reel slowly
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. In conclusion, there are always two sides to a coin.
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these entertainers and relaxers put our body
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ease,
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can
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disturb the peace of our minds. Violence is not a
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it is a
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. I do not believe all
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or
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games
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promote violent
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. Some can prove to be quite an inspiration.

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Task response
Plan your essay. Say your view at once. Then, give both sides in separate parts, and end with your own clear view.
Coherence and cohesion
Keep to one idea in each paragraph. Make the link to the next idea with small words like 'also' or 'but'.
Coherence and cohesion
Use clear and simple link words. Use on the one hand, on the other hand, and then your view.
Language use
Fix grammar and spell wrong words. Use short and easy sentences.
Content
Pick facts and examples that fit the point. Do not use names or facts that do not fit.
Content
The essay tries to talk about both sides.
Structure
It has a clear end with an opinion.
Content
There are ideas to relax and to learn, not only harm.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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