The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The bar chart displays the proportion of the Australian population constant body

activity

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based on

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groups in 2010.

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female figures continued to be the highest compared to the

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of

male

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males

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in all different groups, where women aged 45-54 hit the highest

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of regular

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, whilst men

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the highest in 15 to 24.

Ladies

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activity

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increases with the

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of

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that

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peak from the

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of 15

intil

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to

the

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of 54

by

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47.7% to 53.3% in

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,

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it gradually decreases to the lowest by 47.1%.

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, males'

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keeps decreasing with

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,

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the younger who aged 15 to 24 are the most active compared to

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apply

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those aged 35-

44

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44,

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where the percentage drops nearly 13.3

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. The

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keeps increasing after the

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of 44, and hits

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second highest

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second-highest

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by 46.7%.