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Band 2.5

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or stop flying altogether do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individual and businesses give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Some individuals
belief
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believe
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 that it is
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an environmental
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environmental
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environmentally
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 friendly decision to decrease travelling by
airplanes
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aeroplane
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. In my opinion,
i
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I
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dont
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don't
 support
this
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 decision
and
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, and
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i
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I
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 am
convencied
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convinced
 that the positive aspects of visiting different far countries
is
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are
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way
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 more than the negative ones for two reasons, first
airplane
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aeroplane
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 is
most
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the most
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 comfortable
way
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 of transportation.
Second,
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decreasing flying will reduce individual
bussiness
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business
. On the one hand, flights are the most convenient and fastest
way
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 of visiting other countries
,
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;
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 a person can arrive at
his
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their
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 final destination within hours.
For instance
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, when
i
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I
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 was pregnant with my first child,
i
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I
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 postponed my
study
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studies
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 in the US and
decied
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decided
 to give birth in my country to be surrounded and supported by
may
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my
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 family
,
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. Although I
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although
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 i was in my
last
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trimister
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trimester
,
i
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I
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 slept the whole trip
and
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, and
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 after 10
hours
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hours,
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i
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I
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am
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was
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 home with
family
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my family
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.
This
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wouldnt
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wouldn't
 be the case if
chose
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I chose
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 any other
way
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.
One
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On
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 the other hand, the economic level of
organaization
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organisations
 and individuals depends largely on domestic and international flights. A strong example is what happened during
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the COVID
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COVID 19
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COVID-19
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 epidemic when flights all over the world
banned
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were banned
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, a sharp drop in shares, and a lot of companies closed because of
finanical
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financial
 distress. In conclusion, flying
shouldnt
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shouldn't
 be reduced or stopped as
this
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affect
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affects
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or
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our
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 lives negatively.

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structure
Your view is clear, but the task asks you to see both sides. Add more on why people may save the env by flying less and how big that save is.
structure
Make each idea in its own part. Start with a short idea sentence, then add details.
language
Use little linking words to connect ideas, like 'first', 'also', 'however', 'in addition'.
language
Check spelling and grammar. Use the simple, common word you know well.
content
Give one strong real example per point and explain how it links to your point.
content
Clear view is stated, so the reader knows your stance.
language
You give a personal example, which makes your point feel real.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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