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The pie charts below show how dangerous waste products are dealt with in three countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie diagrams illustrate dangerous
waste
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 management in
Republic
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the Republic
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 of
Korea
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,
Sweden
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, and
United
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the United
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 Kingdom.
Overall
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,
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UK
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the UK
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 use more various
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method
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methods
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 to manage dangerous
waste
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, meanwhile
Korea
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 and
Sweden
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 only
utilize
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utilise
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three
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 methods. Burrying the
waste
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 is the only
method
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 that's applied in the
three
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 countries. Starting from
Korea
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, 69% of the hazardous
waste
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 was recycled,
while
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 the rest 22%
were
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was
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burried
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buried
 underground and 9%
were
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was
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 incinerated.
On the other hand
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,
Sweden
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 used the exact same
three
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method
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methods
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 as
Korea
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, but it distributes differently. Underground was the most used
method
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 that contributed to
manage
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managing
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 55% of the country's hazardous
waste
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, followed by recycling (25%) and burning (20%).
Last
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 but not least, four out of five dangerous
waste
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 in
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UK
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the UK
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were
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was
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burried
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buried
inside
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in
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 the land, it was
most
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the most
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familiar
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common
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 way to handle the
waste
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 there.
In addition
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,
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UK
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the UK
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also
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 used chemical treatment and dumping the
waste
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 at
the
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apply
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sea as a system.
Eventhough
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Even
, the
utilization
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utilisation
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were
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was
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 less common
with
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, with
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 only 8% each
were
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was
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 treated with
chemical
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chemicals
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 and dumped at
the
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apply
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sea, meanwhile the rest were
incirenated
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incinerated
. In conclusion, underground was used in the
three
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 countries
and
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, and
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 its usage was most common in
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UK
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the UK
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, followed by
Sweden
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,
then
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Korea
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.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, korea, sweden, uk, method, three with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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