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The chart show requests for information at a tourist office in the United kingdom from january to june

The line chart
illiustrates
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illustrates
 the trend of the number of
enquires
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 lodged at the tourist
office
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 in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom from
January
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 to
June
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 by various methods, namely: in person, by letter/email and by telephone.
Overall
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, we can see that the number of
in person
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in-person
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enquiries
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have
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has
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 sharply increased from
January
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 to
June
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.
Requests
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 received by telephone
was
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were
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 the highest in the first three
months
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 of our observation period
but
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, but
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becomes
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became
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 a second preference by the
vistors
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visitors
 between April to
June
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.
Enquiries
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 by letter/email
surpasses
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surpass
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 in-person
enquiries
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 in
January
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 and February but sharply
declines
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decline
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 as the least preferred from March onwards. The tourist
office
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 registers a little above 400 in-person
enquiries
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 in
January
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which
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, which
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 gradually increases in the next two
months
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 to about 600 and 800
enquiries
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 respectively. After which, it sees a sharp increase to slightly more than 1200 in the month of April and reaches approximately
to
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1900 by the end of the observation period. In
January
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, the
office
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 registered the highest
enquiries
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 by telephone, accounting
to
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for
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 about 900. It dipped in the following month to about 800, post which it remained consistent at 1000
requests
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 for the next two consecutive
months
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. In May and
June
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, even though the
requests
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 increased to about 1400 and 1600
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respectively
respecively
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respecively,
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 it remained lower than in-person
request
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requests
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 filed by the
office
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.
Enquiries
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 by letter/email
was
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were
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 the only
menas
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means
 which saw a steady decline over the
months
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with
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, with
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 a little less than 800
requests
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 in
January
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 compared to approximately 400 in
June
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.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words office, january, june, enquiries, requests, months with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declines" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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