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The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart
illustrate
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 the rates of women going into higher education in five countries between 1980 and 2015.
Overall
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, Australia experienced the
haghest
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highest
rate between 1980 and 2015,
while
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 South Korea showed
a
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the
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 lowest percentage from 1980 to 2015. And most of
thiese
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these
 countries had
fluctuated
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 rates.
UK
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The UK
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 experienced about 35% and
USA
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the USA
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 had around 39%,
while
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 in UK showed in 2015 about 55% and
USA
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the USA
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 showed 59% equal
with
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to
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 Australia
,
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;
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however
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 UK and
USA
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the USA
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almost
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were almost
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 equal throughout the
period
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. Australia experienced stability throughout the
period
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, in 1980 had around 59% and
continued
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continuing at
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 around 59% throughout the
period
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. South Korea experienced the lowest rate in
this
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period
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. In 1980 had approximately 15% and increased to around 30% in 2015,
meantime
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France had about 50% in 1980 and had an upward trend to around 53% in 2015.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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