The map show a change of coastal town, called Petland, from 1950 to 2007

The maps
illustrates
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the development that took place in Petland, a
costal
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coastal
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town
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from the years 1950 to 2007.
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, it is clearly evident that
of
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residential
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area
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and numerous amenities were constructed in the
town
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till the year 2007.Meanwhile few locations
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such
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, such
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industrial
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as industrial
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area
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areas
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and parking
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lots
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lot
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lot,
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were removed and relocated
respectively
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, respectively
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. In 1950, there
is
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a main road located in the centre.
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there was a Car
park
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to the east of the
town
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,
industrial
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an industrial
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area
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was located just opposite
to
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it, in the west. In 2007, many shops were constructed around the main road
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.
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, the
south east
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southeast
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was
occuiped
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occupied
by a
residental
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residential
area
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, which was an empty grassland in
initial
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the initial
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layout.
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to
that
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that,
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a cinema hall was constructed in south
west
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of the
town
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. Moving towards the north of the
town
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, the sea was transformed into
Yacht
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a Yacht
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Marina.
Industrial
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area
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was demolished and reconstructed into a multi-storey car
park
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, which was located in the east in the year 1950.
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to that, a swimming pool and
park
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were
build
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near the car
park
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.
Meanwhile
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in the
northeast
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northeast,
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a few houses were added to the layout just across the road from the Marina Yacht.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town, area, park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • coast
  • beach
  • town
  • harbor
  • road
  • house
  • houses
  • shop
  • shops
  • park
  • field
  • farm
  • water
  • map
  • year
  • grow
  • build
  • built
  • change
  • expand
  • develop
  • replace
  • new
  • old
  • more
  • less
  • along
  • near
  • center
  • edge
  • fishing
  • tourists
  • people
  • area
  • land
  • sea
  • bay
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