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a building company in planning to build new houses on some land near where you live, and has asked the public for comments. write a letter to the manger of the building company. in your letter say how you heard about the building company plan give your opinion of the plan say what you hope the bulding company will do

Dear Sir, I am writing to inform, that I have
listened
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heard
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 that your company will build new apartments on some land near my hometown. I
have
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know
,
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 your company will build 30 30-room
apartment
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apartments
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 and will construct
in
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them in
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 the summer next year.
i
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I
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 think
,
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 that it is an easy construction, because the weather in summer is convenient. It plays a pivotal role in the building company's plan. My hometown does
nothave apark
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not have a park
, which people really need a plaza. I have an opinion
,
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 your group should build a park. I think
,
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 it is wunderbar to have more customers and it is flexible, convenient for everyone. What is more, individuals can
organized
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organise
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 sports activities , running… to relax and discuss with family and friends after work.
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Besides
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 it helps people feel happy and have
newnews
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new
neighbour
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neighbours
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. I hope
,
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 that your group will change plans to build a garden in the new house. What is more, I hope the building group will build soon complete plan and develop more in the future. Ms Van Anh

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content
Focus on three parts: how you heard about the plan, your clear view on it, and what you want the company to do. Use one idea per paragraph.
tone
Make the tone steadier and more polite. Use a proper closing like ‘Yours sincerely’ and your name.
language
Use short, plain sentences. Remove extra or wrong words to help read.
tone
The letter has a formal start and shows respect to the reader.
content
It gives a clear wish for a park or garden in the plan.
content
The writer says how they heard about the plan, which matches the task.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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