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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The pie charts compare the proportion of
water
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 used in industry, farming, and daily life in different parts of the world.
Overall
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, local residents in these areas mainly
use
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water
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 for producing crops and household
use
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.
According to
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 the data, 88%, 84%, and 81% of agricultural
water
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use
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 can be found in central
Asia
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, Africa, and South East
Asia
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, respectively, followed by 71% in South
America
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. The figures are much lower in North
America
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 (39%) and
Europe
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 (32%).
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, industrial activity constitutes the largest share in
water
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usage
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 in
Europe
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, 53%, which far exceeds that of all other regions except for North
America
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. Specifically, the percentage of industrial
water
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usage
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 in
Europe
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 is over four times, seven times, and ten times the figures of South East
Asia
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, Africa and Central
Asia
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. Similar to the low proportion of industrial
water
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usage
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 in Central
Asia
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, only 7% of
water
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 is allocated to family
use
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, which is the same as that in Southeast
Asia
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. South
America
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 and
Europe
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,
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 significantly higher, contribute 19% and 15%. Notably, South
America
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 records the highest
water
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usage
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 in daily life. In summary, agriculture and industry are the dominant consumers of
water
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 in all
of
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the
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apply
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six areas.
Moreover
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, in Africa and central
Asia
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, the gap between domestic
use
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 and industrial
use
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 is very small.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use, asia, america, europe, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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