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Band 3.5

Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas (in words, pictures, music or film) in whichever way they wish.There should be no government restrictions on what they do. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In recent years, the debate about
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 of creative artists to express their ideas without government restrictions has
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 a lot of attention.
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 I believe that
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artist
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 should have the
freedom
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 to express themselves, I
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 agree that some level of regulation might be needed to maintain social harmony. On one hand, giving
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 the
freedom
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 to express their thoughts and emotions through different
mediums
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 —
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 as words, pictures, music, or films — is important for creativity and innovation. Art
reflect
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reflects
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 society and
provide
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provides
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 a way for people to share their unique perspectives. When
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artist
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artists
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 can freely explore different themes, they contribute to
culture
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 development and promote social discussion. Restrictions can limit creativity, leading to art that lacks
original
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 and depth.
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, it is important to realise that too much
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 could lead to works that might offend or harm some groups. Governments have a responsibility to make sure public order
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 kept
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 social values are respected.
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, art that
promote
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promotes
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 hate speech or violence can harm
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 unity. So, some regulation might be necessary to prevent
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 impacts of unrestricted artistic expression. In conclusion, the
freedom
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 for
artist
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 to express their ideas is vital for culture and society.
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, it is
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 necessary to have some regulations to ensure
this
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freedom
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 does not violate the rights and safety of
other
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others
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. A
balance
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 approach can support a diverse and rich artistic environment
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 keeping social harmony.

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grammar
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development
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coherence
Use simple link words (but, also, so, and) to join ideas and show how they fit.
stance
Your view is clear: some freedom with care.
balance
You try to show both sides of the idea.
structure
The end tries to sum up the idea.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Freedom of expression
  • Censorship
  • Artistic integrity
  • Cultural identity
  • Social responsibility
  • Public order
  • Discrimination
  • Hate speech
  • Self-regulation
  • Government intervention
  • Vulnerable groups
  • Creativity
  • Democracy
  • Fundamental right
  • Moral obligation
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