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Writing Samples
Band 1

Fossil fuels are the main source of energy around the world. However, people are encouraged to use alternative energy sources such as wind energy, solar energy and so on. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Most of the industries rely on fossil fuels as
the
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 essential part of the power around the globe. Despite
,  
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this,  this
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this
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 type of consumption could already be replaced by the
mean
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means
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 of the power plants which produce drastically low
green
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greenhouse
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 gas emissions.
This
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 type of
energies
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energy
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 comes from natural
force
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forces
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such
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 as
:
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apply
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 wind energy, solar energy and etc. Fossil fuel
versetaility
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versatility
 can not be ignored as it takes a
curical
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crucial
 part in a fast-paced modern
enviroment
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environment
, as it
consumed
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is consumed
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 by many
varietes
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varieties
 of
vehiceles
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vehicles
 on a
dailiy
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daily
 basis
,
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.
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Although
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,
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apply
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this
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 type of practice could lead to
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an enermous
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enermous
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enormous
 amount of emissions of
greengas
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greenhouse gases
,
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 could become potentially hazardous to the planet's
eco system
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ecosystem
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, first
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. First
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 and foremost example is pollution takes
upon
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on
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 water ponds as the excavation of
this
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 material impacts
on
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the
drinkinkable
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drinkable
 water resource
, another
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 example could be brought is that

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Task Response
Your answer has some good ideas about wind and sun power, but you do not clearly take a side or say if it is good or bad.
Task Response
Add a clear yes or no line at the start and restate it at the end to show your view.
Task Response
Use more facts or clear points. The text has weak or unclear examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on flow. Link ideas with simple words like 'also', 'but', 'so' to move from one idea to the next.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make a small plan before you write. Use a intro, 2 or 3 main ideas, and a short end.
Content strength
The essay shows a good aim to use green energy as a next step.
Potential
The topic is kept in mind and there is an attempt to explain why energy change matters.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fossil fuels
  • alternative energy sources
  • wind energy
  • solar energy
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • environmental benefits
  • reduction of greenhouse gas emissions
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable energy
  • energy independence
  • energy security
  • cost challenges
  • infrastructure challenges
  • reliability issues
  • intermittency issues
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