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Band 5

The bar chart below shows the passenger kilometres traveled by different means of transport in the UK in 1990 and 2000.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph illustrates the information about the passenger kilometres
traveled
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travelled
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 by different modes, including the cycle, bike, air, bus, and
the
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apply
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trains
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train
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of
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 the UK from 1990 to 2000. In overview, public transportation was most popular throughout the period,
such
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 as the train and the buses as well.
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 individuals are less likely to travel by flight. In 1990, people were less interested in getting cycle rides and motorbikes, which were around 2
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kilometers
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kilometres
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 and 4
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kilometers
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kilometres
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. The UK people were
traveling
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travelling
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 on the buses, which accounted for almost 45
billion
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kilometers
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kilometres
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.
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, the trains were similar in both years, 39
billion
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kilometers
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 and 42
billion
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kilometers
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kilometres
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.
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, people were not preferred by the airlines
,
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 in the given period, it was approximately 5
billion
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kilometers
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kilometres
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words kilometers, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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