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The table below shows the change in some household types in Great Britain from 1971 to 2007

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The table illustrates how the proportions of various household types in Great Britain transformed between 1971 and 2007.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the one-person household and lone parent families both increased over the period,
while
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 the dependent
children
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 declined significantly.
In contrast
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, no
children
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 rose rapidly until the end of the year. As the table shows, in 1971 only 6% of
households
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 consisted of one person, but
this
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 figure grew to 12% by 2001, where it
then
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 unchanged in 2007. Turning to the without
children
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 began with 19% of
households
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 , and it doubled to 25 % by 2001.
Whereas
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 it stayed the same in 2007. Regarding
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 dependent
children
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 started with 52 % of
households
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.
However
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, it declined significantly to 36% by 2007. The non-dependent
children
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 were only 10% of
households
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.
By contrast
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, a small decrease to 9 % by 2001 , but it was
then
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 almost the same in 2007. The lone parent started with 4 per cent of
households
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,
while
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 it went up to 12% by 2001.
In contrast
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, it remained steady between 2001 and 2007.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words children, households with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic shift
  • household composition
  • nuclear family
  • single-parent household
  • cohabiting couple
  • trend analysis
  • socio-economic factors
  • regional variations
  • household structure changes
  • notable increase
  • steady decline
  • fluctuating pattern
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