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The table below shows the change in some household types in Great Britain from 1971 to 2007

The table illustrates how the proportions of various household types in Great Britain transformed between 1971 and 2007.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the one-person household and lone parent families both increased over the period,
while
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 the dependent
children
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 declined significantly.
In contrast
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, no
children
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 rose rapidly until the end of the year. As the table shows, in 1971 only 6% of
households
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 consisted of one person, but
this
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 figure grew to 12% by 2001, where it
then
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 unchanged in 2007. Turning to the without
children
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 began with 19% of
households
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 , and it doubled to 25 % by 2001.
Whereas
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 it stayed the same in 2007. Regarding
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 dependent
children
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 started with 52 % of
households
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.
However
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, it declined significantly to 36% by 2007. The non-dependent
children
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 were only 10% of
households
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.
By contrast
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, a small decrease to 9 % by 2001 , but it was
then
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 almost the same in 2007. The lone parent started with 4 per cent of
households
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,
while
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 it went up to 12% by 2001.
In contrast
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, it remained steady between 2001 and 2007.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words children, households with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic shift
  • household composition
  • nuclear family
  • single-parent household
  • cohabiting couple
  • trend analysis
  • socio-economic factors
  • regional variations
  • household structure changes
  • notable increase
  • steady decline
  • fluctuating pattern
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