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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main fewtures, and make comparisons where relevant

The given line chart shows the urban
population
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 proportions among four Asian countries between 1970 and 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. The units are measured
in
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as
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percentage
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a percentage
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 of
total
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the total
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population
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.
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, it can clearly be seen that all cities were experiencing
gradual
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a gradual
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 increase over the years and are predicted to reach their peak by 2040. In terms of two of the highest
population
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level
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levels
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 at the beginning,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 and Malaysia stood approximately at the same point, which was 30
percent
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per cent
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. In the following 3 decades, both were increasing steadily and converged twice at around 48%
in
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apply
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just before and after 1990. From that point onwards, the Malaysia percentage was soaring significantly by about 20%,
whereas
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 showed a slight fall by around 5% between 1990 and 2019, before rising steadily by 10% from 2010 to 2040. As for Indonesia, it stood at around 15% in 1970, which is slightly lower than Thailand at about 17%. In the following years, both Indonesia and Thailand steadily rose by roughly 15% and converged in 2000 at about 25%. From that point onwards,
lndonesia
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Indonesia
 and Thailand were growing considerably by approximately 35% and around 18% respectively in the forecasted year of 2040.
Due to
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 its immense growth, Indonesia is predicted to have the second-highest urban
population
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,
although
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initially
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 it ranked the lowest.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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