Nowadays most green energy is becoming evermore prevalent in both developed and developing countries. Some argue they greatly reduce costs and are better for the environment, others believe they are a serious threat to energy security. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Now more than ever,
energy
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obtained from natural elements
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popular in both the developing
as well as
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developed nations. It is thought by some to be cheaper and safer,
whereas
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others do not find it reliable. In my opinion, clean
energy
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is a great alternative to the traditional forms of
energy
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. Electricity produced from renewable sources
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far more futuristic
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than the
ones
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made from the depletable products.
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, wind is a
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continuous
force of nature,
thus
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making it
ever lasting
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and a stable form of
energy
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source with very
less
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little
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capital needed for its
coversion
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conversion
.
Furthemore
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Furthermore
, these forms of power
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do not release any harmful
by products
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byproducts
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in the atmosphere, making it safer and
healthy
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for the population.
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these are found in abundance, there is a strong dependency on the course of
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the weather
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and the demography of the land.
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, what if the wind is not strong today or the monsoon is too short ? Hydro-electricity can work in rainy territories and can prove unreliable in dry regions.
This
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makes it extremely hard to predict the amount of power that can be generated.
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, not meeting the demand and consumption satisfaction.
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,
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people doubt its availability. In conclusion,
although
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unpredictable and demographically dependent, reusable
energy
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resources are better, if compared to the depletable sources of power that have higher processing
cost
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costs
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and harmful
by products
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byproducts
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.

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structure
Add a clearer view of the other side and give more proof to your claim.
coherence
Make each paragraph about one main idea. Start with a topic sentence.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar. Watch subject–verb form and punctuation.
content
Explain how energy security is hurt or helped by the choice and what it means for people.
vocabulary
Use simple words and short sentences to show control of language.
task response
There is a clear view on clean energy.
coherence
The essay uses linking words like Although, For instance, Hence.
structure
There is a closing part that sums up the point.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainable
  • Renewable energy sources
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Hydro energy
  • Greenhouse gases
  • Global warming
  • Climate change
  • Technology advancements
  • Economies of scale
  • Intermittent
  • Variable
  • Capital investment
  • Energy infrastructure
  • Energy storage technology
  • Energy supply
  • Energy security
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