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The charts below show the residential water use in 1988 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons

The given pie graphs depict the changes in residential
water
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 use, like bathroom, toilets, washing,
kitchen
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, and garden, from 1988 to 2008.
Overall
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, the number of residential
water
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 use witnessed significant fluctuation in the bathroom, toilets, washing,
kitchen
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, and garden. The figures for
water
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 for washing in 1988 are
highest
Correct article usage
the highest
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,
while
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 the opposite is true of the
kitchen
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.
Besides
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, the statistics of the
kitchen
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 in 2008 are the highest, and the opposite is true of the garden. In terms of gardens, the number of residential
water
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 was dropped significantly from 20% to 7% between 1988 and 2008. In toilets, there was a slight decrease from 18% in 1988 to 14% in 2008. Ultimately, the data on washing plunged considerably between 25% and 22% units from 1988 to 2008. Regarding the data on bathrooms, there was a steady increase from 22% in 1988 to 28% in 2008.
Finally
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, the statistics of the
kitchen
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 went up from 15% to 29% units between 1988 and 2008.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, kitchen with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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